Wednesday, November 19, 2008
New intro
-----In December of 1773, the Patriots of Boston, Massachusetts threw 45 tons of tea into the Boston Harbor. In retaliation, British Parliament saw fit to punish the people of Boston by blocking up their harbor with warships. As a mother punishes her son or daughter, so Britain punished America. All the British government wanted was for the Bostonians to replace the tea and apologize, but the arrogance of the Bostonian Patriots would not allow this. Did the residents of Boston not take into account the consequences of their actions? It was not the offences of the British that caused this war, but the offenses of the Americans. British rule has afforded economic stability and has maintained a fair leadership in the colonies, but especially in Massachusetts.
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2 comments:
This introduction is definitely more clear than the previous one.
It's a unique way to start the essay, just make sure you have a good transition from this to the rest of the paper, otherwise it will seem out of place.
Good job though.
hey man, i think you need a more eye humping intro.. like make it more in your face,i think it starts out slow then pick up place when u say warships.
this sentence does not flow at all lol "As a mother punishes her son or daughter, so Britain punished America" i htink you shoud ither cut it or rewrite it so it flows better.
and craig said not to ask the reader any questions cuz that makes THEM think and not what YOU want them to think
also you should state your main ideas in your thesis besause after reading this it was not clear what exactly you were going to write about...
dude spoons was hella fun
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